(Red, Hard, Mountain, Floated, Umbrella)
The Adventures of Ted - Volume#1
As Ted sat outside with Tim, his boxer dog he was wearing his favourite red boxing gloves. Ted heard his friend Bob yelp “Help!” Bob was supposed to be floating down the river he floated for 0.5 seconds. That happens when you wear titanium and float on a umbrella. Of course Ted saved him. Once Ted sat back down he heard a astronaut job on the radio, he saw an astronaut job opening, He yelled to his sister “Ha! I'm gonna beat’cha!” “Naw ung” Timmy squealed “Come Kim the Demonic Kat”
Once Ted got there he was ready, until Deputy Donut entered.
Your story was kind of confusing the whole way threw. And you had some grammar errors example. "Naw,ung"
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ReplyDeleteI don`t really get your story. But I think you should use some powerful words in your story. And there are some places you need commas in.maybe you could read your story over again and check if everything is right. But good job!
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